STATUS: Another gorgeous day and guess what? A lovely walk home is Chutney's favorite part of the day.
What’s playing on the XM or iPod right now? WAITING IN VAIN by Bob Marley
Here's another culprit that can sink your opening pages or opening chapters.
I call it double trouble. It's when a writer has a terrific scene, great dialogue, good character reveal, what have you… then the writer feels the need to analyze the scene over again from a main character's inner thought monologue.
Ack! When I do charity 30-page critiques, I spend a lot of time deleting out this kind of repetition. By the way, established writers sometimes do this too and this is when you hope that the author has a great editor who will judiciously cut these moments.
Writers do it to make sure the reader fully understands or gets the joke.
Trust me, if you did your scene right, you won't need this inner monologue contemplation.
While I was at the SCBWI conference over the weekend, it occurred to me that I should create a workshop on how to critique. The audience would be critique partners looking to develop their skills so as to help one another.
I think I would call it Critique Like An Agent.